Humans or Technology?

Technology. A common, mundane word that has become frequent in the human language. So common, in fact, that it has a general meaning enveloping various kinds of things in the world. It is often used to describe anything in the modern world because every up-and-coming thing is a new technological tool or advancement. However, do people even consider the origin of the word they use so commonly? The rapid growth of technology in this world has rooted itself in the domestication of the human race.

The origin of technology may or may not be known to most people. A common individual might think that the first technological tool was created with the first humans. However, according to Kevin Kelly, “technology predated our humanness” (Kelly 21). Animals would use technology to create an easier way of getting their food; like using a stick or a rock to retrieve it. Throughout the course of time, humans have taken these basic ideas from other animals and have developed all sorts of sophisticated technological advancements, so sophisticated they almost seem fake.  For example, a computer 1,000 years ago would have seemed so strange. However, have all of these advancements over the course of human existence really been advancements for the good of all society?

Technology is not the only thing that has evolved in this world. Humans’ genes have coevolved with our inventions “100 times faster in the last 10,000 years than the average rate for the previous six million years” (Kelly 37). This is not necessarily a good advancement. In other words, we, the human race, have domesticated every part of ourselves. We have “shrinking teeth” and “thinner muscles” and “less hair” (Kelly 37). Therefore, we have created our own destiny and are incapable of life without technology. So are humans being innovative or just trying to be one with technology?

This idea of new technology and advancement are spread in various ways. According to Carey, there are two types of communication: transmission and ritual (15). Through these ways technological advancements can either be used to get people to unite together through it or to try and get people to know about it. However, it may be a little of both. With the increase of flow of communication through time, the more communication of technological advancement and therefore the more we, humans, change. Technology is growing closer to the human population and is so close that one could consider them almost one in the same. With new technologies like Siri for the iPhone and human robots like Sophia being developed, technology is becoming more and more human-like. The inventors of these technologies even give them human names. Therefore, is there a possibility in the future we will completely become dependent on technology; or even the possibility that technology will outdate the human race considering humans are making it have human characteristics?

With this idea in mind, I think we, the human race, should consider this more often when praising technological ‘advancements’. Think about this when you use an app to order food and when you have robots to process human emotions for tasks and take out the very core of humanity that makes us who we are. Is that really an advancement we need in this world?


3 thoughts on “Humans or Technology?

  1. This is a solid start: the piece raises multiple key issues from Kelly and brings Carey to bear on the discussion as well. However, there are some issues to work on in the next draft.

    The first and most prominent is that it is unclear in this draft what the central thesis of the piece is, the one idea that connects all the various elements together. The first paragraph leads the reader to think it’s that last sentence question about the origin of the word, but the second para leads in a different direction, toward *human* origins. Then each subsequent para leads in a slightly different direction, ending with a different question that is similar to but not clearly connected to the one before it. So the overall piece needs more coherence from the start: a statement (or perhaps question) that ties all the elements together.

    Second, there are some statements here, like “some believe” and “human robots” that are not common knowledge and should be supported with links to outside sources (you might consider a link for Siri as well).

    Finally, there are some grammar and syntax choices that could be smoothed out; things like “infiltrated” (probably not the word you want there), “up and coming” (generally has hyphens instead of spaces), and “Kelly 37).” (citations come after a quotation, not inside it).

    Overall, the piece seems to be addressing some important themes that, if re-organized and re-worked somewhat, could turn into a solid text response. Keep working on this. 🙂


  2. OK, the central thesis is more clear here. Count it. For your next Response, though, I would watch out for a couple of things in your writing. First, the strong tendency to end each paragraph with a question is not only a bit rigid in its form, but tends to make the connections between paragraphs harder to see (since the question is a summary of the previous paragraph in question form), which makes the overall form of the essay less clear. I would recommend using this technique much more sparingly in the future. Second, be careful of claims like, “humans have taken these basic ideas from other animals”: without direct evidence from an authoritative source like the reading, such a claim overreaches and undermines your own status as author. Plus, you don’t actually need to make sweeping claims like this to persuade your reader of your point of view: you have a solid argument just based on the evidence you do cite in this piece. 🙂


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